Yes, the tone is (still) not good enough. You improve it several times. Even after revision, one sentence still sounds like you trying to guide her hand, too sure, too smooth, too eager to be the smartest person in someone else’s risk department. You remove it and feel the message become less satisfying and more believable, which is exactly the sensation you have learned to trust. The best lie here is not persuasive. It is familiar: the tone of someone who has been in enough meetings to hate them, who speaks in the flattened language of people who do not want to be quoted later. You read the draft aloud, quietly, and imagine Isabella reading it on a phone between obligations. You try to hear where she might pause. Pauses are danger. You save the file under a boring name, because drama belongs in the story, not in the filename. Who will you attack? Marc? Isabella? _You realise the real obstacle isn't tone but the required approver's signature... **Marc** would be the best target we could influence with a nice bait, by impersonating Isabella. Before sending anything to Marc, you need Dane to check whether the lure feels authentic enough to pass._ [[Dane Reviews The Lure|Have Dane review the lure for Marc]] _After several careful revision, you are ready to send your best and finely crafted email. **Isabella** is the best target for this document_ [[Cybercrime/The_Phisherman/You are ready. Send the Message To Isabella|You are ready. Send the Message To Isabella]]